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PostSubject: Pokémon: Genesis   Mon Sep 30, 2013 8:29 am

Chronicling the adventures of a budding new trainer named Jamie as she sets out, not only to find her missing twin sister, but to compete in the Pokémon League Championship.  Traversing the region of Kanto, Jamie gathers a nice party of friends and Pokémon along the way.  But will she succeed in her goals?


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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Mon Sep 30, 2013 4:46 pm

Nice idea! I'm a Pokemon fan, so if ya need any help, I'll be here Very Happy
I'll be looking forward to reading about this!
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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Mon Sep 30, 2013 7:01 pm

I would try to get your research/aid from more than one source.

Sounds very interesting. Since she plans on entering the Pokemon League, I'm assuming she's gonna be earning badges too? Or since it's the Championship she already has all eight badges?
I am quite curious which pokemon will make an appearance. I will enjoy reading this one for sure.
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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Mon Sep 30, 2013 8:47 pm

Oh, I've followed Pokémon since I was three. It'll be fun.
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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Wed Oct 02, 2013 2:35 am

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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Thu Oct 03, 2013 9:40 am

New Episode Has Been Published.  Reminder!  The below tabs do contain spoilers!

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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Thu Oct 03, 2013 11:32 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Fri Oct 04, 2013 6:15 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Fri Oct 04, 2013 10:45 pm

Pokemon Genesis Entry 1 Feedback
Hello, I read your first entry. Not bad at all, but I would like to point out some things.
1. It seemed a bit rushed; I can understand the need for wanting to start out with something dramatic, in this case the fateful encounter with Slayer. That is indeed a method to grab the reader's attention. However, everything after that, it seemed like time zoomed by. I never really got to exactly get to know who Jamie and Nikki truly are(I have no pathos for them dear); I don't know their interests, or their relationship with each other. It seemed fairly close, but there was no character development there.
Characters are a critical part of the story- you need to let us know who they are exactly so we can have an idea on their reactions. I can see why you want to jump right into her finding her sister, but you need always have a good exposition before the inciting incident (which is the sister being missing)
2. Why did Jamie choose Bulbasaur over the other two pokemon? It never really says why. There should have been something that appealed to Jamie to make her heart set on it. (like, what made the other two pokemon so unappealing compared to the bulbasaur.)
Well, here's your positive feedback:
1. I like the concept of a mysterious disappearance and the twin sister going to find her. I hope we learn more about who Slayer is through Jamie's conversations in the future with people. I'm excited to see his true motivation in this world and I hope he's a big deal bad guy.
2. I like how you used many references to pokemon characters, I can't wait to see more! *o*
I will review the next few entries together hopefully <3 keep working on it, you're doing fine overall. I didn't really spot any grammar mistakes.
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PostSubject: Re: Pokémon: Genesis   Tue Oct 08, 2013 9:21 am

Pardon the delay. I've been busy working on videos and the like. I'll have a new one together soon.
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