EonArashi Pen Wielder


Posts : 199 Likes : 4 Join date : 2013-06-18 Location : Somewhere between sanity and reality Humor : Of course. A humor section. After all, everyone knows that the best way to tell a joke is to have no context, and just improv on the fly *rolls eyes*
 | Subject: "Walking the Razor's Edge" Discussion Thu Nov 14, 2013 12:17 am | |
| So this is where I would like feedback for my story. This can be anything you want, but I'd prefer constructive criticism and (if you don't feel you can do that or can't find much to give concrit for) what you liked best and why.
If you're reviewing a new chapter, let me know which chapter you're reviewing!
Cheers,
Eon |
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Brian RP Laureate


Posts : 501 Likes : 17 Join date : 2013-01-18 Location : At your girlfriend's house Humor : mr steal yo gurl
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 | Subject: Re: "Walking the Razor's Edge" Discussion Thu Nov 14, 2013 10:58 am | |
| - EonArashi wrote:
- people live side-by-side with creatures who can breathe fire as easily as they do air
That gave me chills xD I like how you're shaping the story around Strahan's quote. I think you should focus more on that than the Pokemon. Keep the Pokemon but make the ideal story about Connor's reincarnation. But of course, that's just my opinion. |
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EonArashi Pen Wielder


Posts : 199 Likes : 4 Join date : 2013-06-18 Location : Somewhere between sanity and reality Humor : Of course. A humor section. After all, everyone knows that the best way to tell a joke is to have no context, and just improv on the fly *rolls eyes*
 | Subject: Re: "Walking the Razor's Edge" Discussion Mon Nov 25, 2013 10:10 pm | |
| - Batman wrote:
- EonArashi wrote:
- people live side-by-side with creatures who can breathe fire as easily as they do air
That gave me chills xD
Excellent  - Batman wrote:
- I like how you're shaping the story around Strahan's quote. I think you should focus more on that than the Pokemon. Keep the Pokemon but make the ideal story about Connor's reincarnation. But of course, that's just my opinion.
I'm not framing the story by that quote, actually. I'm putting in one quote per chapter that I think fits the theme of the chapter itself. And this is mainly going to be a world-building story, learning more about the people, places, and Pokémon involved. I'm going to be correcting some things I don't think make sense, making allowances for certain oversights, and generally trying to explain and elaborate on everything that strikes my fancy. This isn't super-serious, it's mostly for fun. ...okay, it has a super-serious plot and stuff, but I'm mostly doing it for fun. |
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